Saturday, February 11, 2017

Second Annual Valentiny Writing Contest Entry


 At the eleventh hour I decided to enter Susanna Leonard Hill's 
Second Annual Pretty Much World Famous
Valen-tiny Writing Contest
Please go to Susanna's blog to read the amazing entries in the comments and click on the links to view even more Valen-TINY stories. Very tiny, as in 214 words or less. Don't forget to stop by Susanna's site on February 20th to vote for your favorites. Thanks for reading. And now...
 
A Picture-Perfect Valentine
by Joanne Roberts
 
   Moose eyed the pile of valentines. On top was a handmade card from Maya. Honestly, he was surprised to see any valentines, let alone one from Maya.
      On the card, she'd drawn a doughnut with sprinkles. "Sweet?" Moose whispered. "Sweetie? Sweet Thing?"
       Next was a picture of something with wings. "A bee," thought Moose.  
      Below that, a drawing of Maya herself. Moose stared, confused.
      Why would Maya give him a valentine? He broke her crayons and stole her snacks. Well, not every day. "Sweetie, be mine."
      Moose grinned.
      "Thanks for the valentine," he told Maya. Now Maya looked confused. "I figured it out. See? Something sweet…"
      "A doughnut," Maya corrected.
      "And a bee."
      "Actually..."
      "And that's you," Moose continued.
      "Well, sure, but…"
      "So the message is, 'Sweetie, be mine!'"
      "Actually," said Maya, her nose wrinkling, "that's just a bug. Get it? 'Donut bug me,' like, leave me alone and don't steal my candy today." Maya walked away, shaking her head.
      Moose blushed. He sank into a chair. Then he noticed another valentine on his desk, two candy hearts glued to construction paper. One said, "PUPPY LOVE." The other said, "NO WAY."  Signed, Chloe.
      "No way," he repeated. "Not puppy love? Then it must be true love."
      "Hey, Chloe," he shouted "thanks for the valentine!"
 
Necco conversation hearts candies

28 comments:

  1. Haha! So cute! Nice job, very funny and creative!

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    1. How kind. Thank-you. It was fun to write.

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  2. Sweet and funny! Happy Valentine's Day, Joanne!

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  3. Poor, poor Moose. I'm thinking this is the runaway moose from "Z is for Moose." Perhaps he needs the zebra to show up to be his valentine. Funny story! Good luck in the competition!

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    1. Thank-you. I read through most of the stories in the comments, but haven't even started on the links yet. Can't wait to read everyone's stories!

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  4. At least Moose got a proper Valentine in the end. Good luck!

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    1. Thanks. I had fun eating...I mean, reading candy hearts for research.

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  5. This is an enjoyable misunderstanding. :) I wish you well with it.

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    1. He'll figure it out eventually. Maybe for Susanna's next contest. LOL Thanks.

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  7. I get a little dazzled by donuts too - poor Moose!
    Cute and funny Valentiny!

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    1. My husband used to be a baker. He used to bring me a doughnut or muffin every day. Sigh. I loved that job! Thanks for commenting.

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  8. Joanne, Love the misinterpretation. lol

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    1. Thank-you. Funny stories are not really my forte.

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  9. You have done a good job with your tiny story. I love how Moose misconstrued the message not only once, but twice. Good luck!!

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    1. Thanks. Endings are the hardest part, don't you think?

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  10. I laughed out loud! Great misinterpretations!

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  11. Nice story,Joanne. Funny misinterpretations. Poor moose! Good luck in the contest.

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    1. Thanks. I wanted to include a child-like drawing too, but figured I'll add it after the judging.

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  12. Hahaha! OMG! You made me laugh, Joanne! Moose is so perfect! So delightfully ready to be optimistic! Thanks for joining in the Valentiny fun!

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    1. Thanks and thanks for sponsoring the contest. I had fun. And I thought Tilly's dilemma was adorable. You fooled me!

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  13. Moose is a little mixed up but at least he has Chloe- maybe. Fun story! Good luck!

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    1. Moose isn't the brightest in the class, but he's enthusiastic! Thanks for commenting.

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